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JJ's Litter Literature
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This is something I started writing in the afternoon, basically because.

I still don't know if this is a one-off or the starting bit for something bigger, but I do hope you enjoy it!

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I don't know if it's that I'm in theater mode, but I had to read that aloud (well, whispering). Something felt off about reading it in my head as the words deserved more than that. As usual, your description of the whole situation transports the reader along with the protagonist. The imagery is powerful, which may add to the need to vocalize it and it also serves an important purpose: reflecting the mood. To some extent, I might say that the environment seems created by the girl herself. The piece might not be in first person, but the reader feels like the girl.

On the more technical end: Your varying sentence structure supports the movement of the piece. For example, "By this point the world was silent, but that silence was often broken by the sounds of nature: a dog protested fiercely on the distance, thunder often appeared on the horizon and made her jump a little, and the omnipresent rain often fell loudly. It was time to go." The first sentence is meandering and continues the previous description of the surroundings, but the second switches the movement of the passage nicely. Although one of the clearest examples of your sentence variation, it is by no means the only one. There were some grammar mistakes here and there ("wanna" is not actually a word in case you didn't know :P), but for not being a native English speaker, your grammar is impeccable. Or... maybe it's because you're not a native English speaker.

So did you have any inspiration behind the piece or did you just sit down and write it?
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I didn't know about wanna... huh xD

I just sat down and wrote it, really :)

Many a thanks for the feedback!
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Yeah, it's actually a way of saying "want to". I know I use it a lot and so do plenty of people so I'm sure that didn't help. XD

Cool. :)

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I love this! Pretty cool!
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Chapter II!

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